Are we supposed to go from the ”which means” text bubble to the ”even if for a little bit” bubble, or to the ”i can allow myself” bubble? The lower half feels abit confusing to read. Other than that, fucking awesome art bro✋🙂‍↕️🤚

To "the even if for a little bit" I assumed that would happen but then i realized that it doesnt feel like it matters if you read it first or last lmao Even if for a little bit, i can allow myself to satiate my hunger Or I can allow myself to satiate my hunger, even if for a little bit

Looks good to me but maybe a bit busy, I feel like that panel down there at the bottom where we see Avati perched on what I think is a building might be a bit much at least in my opinion. I feel like you could keep the mouth and hand shot but then maybe make the large image of Avati as a single page spread, to really hammer home the character. IMO.

I see. Im glad that most of the critics are about the usage of space cuz it only happened because i really wanted to use just a single page lmao, which is not something id do on an actual multi page comic😅

Let the comic spread across a double page, so everything is bigger 🫡

seems to be a common notion 😅 I just wanted to do a one page work so i didnt have to do a 2 image post 😭 I'll be more generous with space next time

Honestly this is straight gas, my only "remark" is that maybe I would have taken the shot in making a whole page for the "if they get through me" image Just a bigger sized "portion" so we can truely get how much enemies he faces

I see. Id be more generous with the space if it was multi paged but since its a one page work i had to cram everything in there lmao Thank you a lot 🥰

This is a cool comic test! I think everyone else mentioned the feedback I was thinking. It’s neat how background colors for the panels start off cooler, then get warmer the further you move down the page. What is Avati sitting on in the last panel? Just curious.

He is just crouched on the ground farming aura or smth lol 😅